Reflection

The topics of the two pieces that I wrote were my experience at a Dave Matthews Concert http://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=ddx8rnk9_08f8krb&hl=en and my experience with a hike with my fatherhttp://docs.google.com/Doc?docid=ddx8rnk9_4db8f3n&hl=en. In the first piece I accomplished I was trying to identify what exactly the concert meant to me and in the second piece I was trying to identify examples of transcendentalism. The main idea of the first piece was my encounter with the Dave Matthews Concert and the main idea of the second piece was how I saw a hike with my father in a different way. While writing each piece I learned to be very vivid in my details and to paint a mental picture for the reader. Mainly everything I wrote I thought sometime about and some of the things I thought I wrote but later erased because I found them too wordy or unnecessary. During this class I have learned how to properly use commas, detail everything mainly, and to not get to wordy or boring.Honestly, for the Dave Matthews piece I wrote I didn’t do all that much revision but when I did I mainly tried to add adjectives and create a mental picture. Those changes, of course, came from what I learned in Mrs. Turner’s class. I tried to keep the same tense throughout the piece as well as limit boring repetition. For example I changed up my sentence structure numerous times in order to meet the criteria for that piece. As for the nature walk when I revised it I made sure that I maintained that same mental image but I also tried to convey that sense of transcendentalism.After reading my peers blogs I noticed how, not bragging, my vocabulary was noticeably more extensive. All of my classmates and myself, met the criteria and excelled in meeting that criteria. I really need to learn a lot of things from this class but the three most important points are that I need to stay in the same tense, I need to not sway to far from the topic, and I need to include a thesis statement as well as list the main points in my introduction paragraph.